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前回の記事のつづきです。
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英検も終わったので、3月からはもう少し身近なTOPICでエッセイを書いています。


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■TOPIC
The cafeteria is starting to serve ice cream as a dessert but only one flavor will be offered. Write a letter to the principal explaining what your choice would be and why?

■娘の書いたエッセイ
Dear Principal,
I think the ice cream flavor in the cafeteria should be chocolate. Here are some reasons. First everyone likes chocolate. Right? Second, in chocolate there is cacao so it is good for your body. Think about it. I bet you loved chocolate too when you were a kid.
From ♡♡


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■TOPIC
Should students be permitted to have their cell phones with them during class?

■娘の書いたエッセイ
No. I have two reasons for this. The first one is, they might play with them. They could play games, text friends, and read books with them. They could do mostly anything with them. The second one is, it could make noises with them such as phone rings. It will be rude for other students and the teachers if they do that. If I become a teacher, I would not let students have there phones with them. Thanks!


Thanksってカジュアルすぎるし(笑)、they/themが多すぎて何を言いたいのか伝わりにくい。今度は Yes の意見で↓↓↓書き直し〜↓↓↓


■娘の書いたエッセイ(書き直し)
Yes, students should be permitted to have their cell phones with them during class. I have two reasons to support this. First, if the students keep their phones in their bags and put the phones in manner mode, they won't bother anyone. Second, I don't think the student's mom make their children take the phones so the children could use them in school. I think the parents want their children to use the phones after school when they go to piano lessons. In conclusion, I believe that students chould be able to have their cell phones with them during class.


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ちょっと回りくどい言い方もありますが、とりあえずこのくらいで子供のエッセイとしてはOKかなぁ、、、と。



ライティングは100文字程度であれば5〜10分で書き上げることができるようになり、随分楽になってきました。


すぐに書き終わると本人への負担も少ないし、この調子で楽しく続けられたらいいです。

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